I'm linking this post up to Time Travel Tuesday- going green by recycling an old post. Welcome Time Travelers and old friends!
When I started the
Story A Day prompts I made a vow to myself that I would at least TRY to write something for each prompt. This one has had me stuck, so I thought I would skip it. Then I found that I couldn't move forward when I had already been doing mental work on one story. Boy am I a picky writer! I have to tell you- this is NOT one of my favorites that I've written. Don't forget to check out the
Short Story tab at the top of the page for some better examples of my writing. As always, I would love to hear what you think I could have done better. On this one I really do need some critique so I can figure out what is "off."
The Prompt:
Write a story featuring an epic battle between good and evil
The Story:
Janice entered the classroom and sat down. She opened her book and quietly read, preparing for the bell to ring in just a couple of minutes. She was considered a nerd, one that kept to herself and didn't have a lot of friends. Her classmates didn't know much about her, but she secretly knew plenty about them.
"Courtney, can you believe it? My dad signed me up for the Junior Miss Pageant! I'm SOOOOO excitied." Alicia squealed with enthusiasm. It took everything she had not to bounce up and down in her chair. "He's never let me do something like this before. I am so totally going to win. I've got this one in the bag. I just know it!"
"I'm entered, too," Janice said, just loud enough to hear, had anyone been listening. "I'm in that pageant. That means we'll be in the same division." Of course no one heard Janice. She was invisible as far as the rest of the students were concerned. They wouldn't have believed her, anyway.
Class started, and talk of the pageant died down. Mr. Armstrong didn't accept disrespectful behavior in his classroom, and everyone knew not to cross him. The students worked on their math lesson until the dismissal bell rang. Janice slipped out, unnoticed.
All month long, the talk was the same. It didn't matter what class they were in. It didn't matter what day it was. All anyone could talk about was that Alicia was entered in the Junior Miss Pageant. She was going to be a star.
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Finally, the big weekend arrived. Alicia was excited, because the entire two and a half days were going to be full and celebrations and all about her. There would be pageant activities Friday night and all day Saturday. The big show was Saturday night, then there would be plenty of congratulatory parties on Sunday afternoon. Alicia had already invited Courtney, Bethany, and Maggie over to see her crown and trophy.
There was no way she was going to lose this pageant. She was, after all, the most beautiful girl at school. Everyone said so, and she had the Homecoming Queen sash to prove it. It hung right above her bed where she could see it right before she fell asleep. Yes, Alicia was on her way to being Junior Miss Phoenix.
The Junior Miss pageant always kicked off the big event with a party for all the participants on Friday night. This was a time for all the girls to meet each other and get to know the competition. Let's face it, the best of the best were also trying to win votes for Miss Congeniality already, too. The girls sized each other up for the first half of the party, but they always relaxed by the time dinner was served. Life long friendships were often formed right here at these tables. Of course, rivalries were also formed, but that was the part the pageant coordinators chose to ignore.
Alicia picked a chair facing the entry at the table in the middle of the room. It was a perfect place to see who was coming in the door and to be seen. She patted her hair, making sure it was perfectly smooth, sat with her most perfect posture, and waited for the attention of all the other girls. Any moment now they would flock to her, wanting to hear all about her exciting life on her dad's ranch. That's the way it worked at school. Why would this pageant be any different.
Fifteen minutes went by, then five more. Alicia started to nervously bite at her finger nails. Why isn't anyone coming to talk to me? Fine, she thought to herself, I'll just go find someone to hang around with. Making friends is never hard for me. Everyone wants to know about how I rode on my first horse by myself at age two. Alicia looked around and found everyone already paired up. The girls were laughing and having a great time. When she tried to jump into the conversations, Alicia was ignored. Well, I never... These girls are just a bunch of stuck up jerks. I don't need them.
Looking around the room, Alicia started to panic. She couldn't find anyone who would let her into their group. She was alone for the first time ever. Alicia had ALWAYS been surrounded by girls. How could it be possible that she was being left out now?
She finally saw another girl sitting by herself in the corner of the room. What a loser, Alicia thought. All by herself in a crowded room like this. I wonder what's wrong with her. Wait a minute... I'm all alone, too. Okay, I'll stop being a creep. Maybe she's nice. I'll go say hello. Maybe together we can find a group to join.
Alicia walked up to the other lone girl. "Hello, I'm Alicia."
"Yeah, I know," said the other girl. "We've been going to school together since first grade. I'm well aware of you and your popularity."
Suddenly, a look of recognition appeared on Alicia's face. "Janice? Janice Robertson? What... what are YOU doing here?"
"The same as you. I told you in math class that I was entered into this pageant. I guess you didn't believe me or something. You're not the only one at school who does interesting things, you know."
"This is impossible," Alicia squealed. "Why would you enter something like this? You don't have a snowball's chance... well, you know." Alicia's eyes narrowed as her brow furrowed. "Wait.. do you REALLY think you can win this thing? Ha, the biggest nerd in school competing against ME. Right! Well, at least now I don't have to worry about winning. That trophy is as good as mine!"
Janice walked away from Alicia. Yeah, I don't know what I was thinking. I'll never be good enough in the eyes of the popular crowd. I'm just going home. Janice went out to the lobby and called her dad. "Can you just come pick me up, please! I knew I couldn't do this. I don't know why I'm here."
Mr. Robertson picked Janice up at the front of the building, but he wasn't willing to give up on her as easily as she was giving up on herself. They went for a long drive, him giving Janice a pep talk about how special she was and how much better she behaved than Alicia. "Honey, I know the judges will see your beauty, because I see it every day. You know the personal interview is worth more than half of the entire score. You are so much more articulate than Alicia. You are smart and funny, and you have a genuine heart. THOSE are the important traits in life. Not Alicia's fake smile and false eyelashes. She doesn't hold a candle to you. I hope you think about that tonight and wake up in the morning ready to go through with this. Don't let her bring you down. You can do this."
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Saturday morning Janice woke, ate breakfast, and dressed in her personal interview attired. Her dad grinned as she told him she was ready to head to the pageant location. He knew Janice was special, now she just needed to show that to the rest of the world.
Janice came out of the interview room, a smile spreading from ear to ear. "I take it you feel the interview went well?" her dad laughed. Let's go have some lunch so you can get ready for this afternoon's main event. The two enjoyed a buffet, then headed back to the hotel where the pageant was to take place.
All the girls in the 14-16 age division lined up on the stage, ready to step out and introduce themselves. Janice had the time of her life. Unlike at school where she was known to be shy, she really stood out during the pageant. She wore makeup for the first time ever, and her hair was done in a way that made Janice feel beautiful. Every time she made a turn, she could feel the satin of her gown brush against her legs. Janice knew she was "on," and it made her feel as if she could do anything. When it came time to answer the final pageant question Janice did not hesitate. She did not stutter. She did not get nervous and shake in her shoes the way she expected to. Janice simply answered the question perfectly, with confidence. She could even see the judges from the stage. They were trying to hide their smiles, but they just couldn't.
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The participants lined up one last time. The winners were about to be announced. Janice stood, smiling out at the crowd and secretly crossing her fingers behind her back. She had enjoyed the pageant so much she was already picturing the next one. It didn't matter if she won; she had accomplished something she never dreamed possible. She had spoken in front of more than 2,000 people and not worried one bit about what they thought. Janice had made HERSELF proud, and that was something to remember for a lifetime.
"Will the following girls step forward. These are the top 10 girls, in no particular order. One of these young ladies will be crowned the 2011 Junior Miss Arizona. Emily Johnson... Beatrice Ford... Marsha Pollack... Amber Corrington... Sarah Wright... Susan Sharpton... Andrea Washington... Brittney Wong... Gabriela Ashton... AND... Janice Robertson!
Janice leaped up and hugged the girl standing next to her. She had made it into the top 10 finalists! If nothing else, Janice had earned $1000 and a guaranteed spot in next year's pageant. She was so excited that she almost missed the name of the winner. "This year's 2011 Junior Miss Arizona winner is.... Miss Andrea Washington! Andrea please step forward to accept your crown. Congratulations!"
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At school Monday morning Janice couldn't help but to walk in proud and sure of herself. She knew that what she had accomplished was huge. She would never again think she was less valuable than the other girls in her class. She would forever know that she was just as pretty as the others.
"So Janice...." drawled one of the most popular girls in the school, "how did you do in the pageant? I hope you didn't LOSE!" Patty started to cackle. "As if you belonged there to begin with. What were you thinking?"
"As a matter of fact, Patty, I was in the top 10. Why don't you ask Alicia how she did?"
Patty turned to Alicia. "How DID you do? Sorry I missed your victory parties this weekend. I was skiing with my family in the mountains. I couldn't even get cell phone reception! How lame is thaaattt?"
"She... she..." Alicia stuttered as she looked for the right words. She finally decided to just spit it out and face the humiliation. "She," Alicia began again, pointing at Janice. "She beat me. It's true. She was in the top 10, and I didn't even get that far." Alicia slammed her math book onto her desk and ran out of the room. She was sure she would never be able to face her classmates again.
Janice hid her smile behind the book she picked up to read before the bell rang. For her, nothing had changed. Nothing, that is, except for the new confidence she had. The other kids at school would never know it, though. Janice was just waiting for the day she would walk in with her winning sash and crown. That would be another time when no words would be needed. Janice was sure it would happen. She now knew she could do anything!